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11:30 pm
January 10, 2010


drsamoor

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My heart is like a dawn,

Intermingled colors,

Where black dies old

And white elaborates a laugh.

A knife in my left hand,

With tremors and tears,

I cope with the nightmares,

To take that beat out.

And the beat is not a dream,

It makes the days pass by,

Like a mislead visitor

In her own land.

So the biting hours,

Eat the thin thread between a second

And a minute,

Stalling my death to dusk.

Yes, not in the dawn,

Too much for a butterfly,

Still sees herself as moth.

HEART, we will forget him! You and I, to-night! You may forget the warmth he gave, I will forget the light. When you have done, pray tell me, That I my thoughts may dim; Haste! lest while you’re lagging, I may remember him! Emily Dickinso

12:08 pm
January 12, 2010


zainab

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posts 67

Samoura, I just love the first four lines. The poem is very beautiful, I dont have any comments except that I felt that it ended too fast, perhaps I didnt want it to. I wanted to savour more on the last image, its very heavy with meaning yet light at the same time.

Just some words perhaps might be changed but yet again, no, nothing I can think of.

Just try to make the last image last longer.

 

"In celebration of the woman I am", Anne Sexton

12:42 pm
January 14, 2010


PlusHuman

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posts 4

Loved It.

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