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Almost… (Shorty Story)

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1:11 pm
December 15, 2010


b.zaazaa

Cairo

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Standing in the smallest possible space that can hardly carry two persons… she tried so hard to avoid any eye contact that may occur…

Looking down to his trembling feet… His heavy breathing so loud in their ears but barely hiding the sound of her heart pounding so hard…

Can't look up, scared of what her eyes might reveal… his hands accidentally touching hers then backing off so quickly

She slowly looked up to see him staring at her, gently pulling her closer…

Her engagement ring never felt heavier… she was trying so hard to focus on all the reasons she left him for…

Their faces are so close… lips barely touching… almost kissing for a minute that seemed like a century to her… but she knew that crossing the "almost" stage would change everything…

She knew it… he knew it… they both knew it…

She knew it can never be kept between them… she knew it will destroy her love life, their friendship and her image…it will just blow up in her face… and will blow up her entire life…

She knew that this tension will never go away regardless of all that might have been…

She knew it was dangerous and forbidden, but she also knew she might never get another chance like this one…

 

1:54 pm
December 15, 2010


Kelma

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Nice story .. but i think i didn`t like the end ….. too much words

i like the idea but u -i think- u must re-write ur end :D


2:07 pm
December 15, 2010


b.zaazaa

Cairo

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Thank you kelma for your kind reply  :)

2:21 pm
December 15, 2010


Kelma

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yw ;)

10:36 am
April 20, 2011


b.zaazaa

Cairo

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Dear Dr. Sahar,

Many thanks for reading my story on air yesterday and for your great comments


I will work a better usage of words to better express the feelings


Regarding  the crossing the "almost" stage, I meant crossing the stage between Almost kissing and actually kissing, moving 2 mm forward


Thanks for your support :)



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